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August 3, 2014
i vanish. by setmyworldintomotion
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Suggested by imaginative-lioness
Literature Text
a few excessive kilograms
adorn my body,
stubborn in their departure:
like an uninvited guest
too dense to perceive
the subtle hints i leave
on my skin;
not feeling as blessed as i
could have been
if i were
thin.
if i am too much
then why do i feel like
i am not enough
for the starved society
that eats away at my insides
& feeds me
empty, palatable lies,
(a fabricated portrayal of reality's demise)
leaving me wishing
that each bittersweet tear i cry
is enough to rid my body,
my healthy home,
of excess salt
all through my eyes;
not realising that the number
beneath my feet
does little to measure
each person who feeds
off of my kindness, my sincerity,
that each time i bleed
myself away
in a well fed wish
to vanish,
i'm just another one of society's prey
losing themselves
to what they weigh.
adorn my body,
stubborn in their departure:
like an uninvited guest
too dense to perceive
the subtle hints i leave
on my skin;
not feeling as blessed as i
could have been
if i were
thin.
if i am too much
then why do i feel like
i am not enough
for the starved society
that eats away at my insides
& feeds me
empty, palatable lies,
(a fabricated portrayal of reality's demise)
leaving me wishing
that each bittersweet tear i cry
is enough to rid my body,
my healthy home,
of excess salt
all through my eyes;
not realising that the number
beneath my feet
does little to measure
each person who feeds
off of my kindness, my sincerity,
that each time i bleed
myself away
in a well fed wish
to vanish,
i'm just another one of society's prey
losing themselves
to what they weigh.
Literature
Small Talk
It's dripping with logic and reason
the question you let gently drop
onto the table between us,
“So, tell me about your life.”
And I'm watching it carefully
telling myself it won't bite
it's more scared of me than I am
and I can capture it with glass.
And I can't rest the answer there
because it's bigger and scarier
and this one will bite will sink
will tear apart the careful stitches.
It's too big for this table
and I can't put it onto you
so it weighs heavy on my neck
and the silence stretches further.
Literature
Visitor
There is a ghost doing handstands on my front lawn,
wrist-deep in fresh soil. Her hands are birds
in flight.
It's late, but no one comes to take her home.
The pale moon offers a silver smile -
the clouds disapprove.
Too tired to dream, she buries her legs in sky.
Tonight she is invincible, untouchable,
this frail girl beneath the stars
this death in light.
-
There is a ghost doing handstands on my front lawn,
falling to her white knees. Her stare is a pane
of glass.
The eyes of the living are often murky but
the eyes of the gone
are windows.
Literature
welcome to the real world
1. if someone invites you back to their place
for coffee, and you only drink tea,
don’t stress:
you probably won’t actually be drinking coffee.
2. when the creepy guy from work asks you out
again and you think about accepting for the first
time because you’re sick of going home alone and
you have never learned how to say no, don’t. learn.
stand in front of the mirror until you love yourself
enough for your skin to fit snug on your body. read
about the hundreds of millions of planets out in the
hundreds of millions of galaxies and feel so crowded
that you’re about to burst all over again.
3. you’re gonna
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i'm currently the appropriate weight for my height & content enough with my body, but it hasn't always been this way & i definitely haven't always been this way.
whilst this barely scratches the surface of my opinions of society's skewed views of beauty, it's a good start as any.
do you find it awkward that the entire poem is basically two (long) sentences? editing suggestions?
whilst this barely scratches the surface of my opinions of society's skewed views of beauty, it's a good start as any.
do you find it awkward that the entire poem is basically two (long) sentences? editing suggestions?
line breaks make sense if read aloud, although i'm pretty sure i screwed it up. contemplating changing it around so it's third-person & then saying this at an open mic night, just because. /:
written in first person to satisfy the title.
for GuinevereToGwen's anagram contest. my first name, shivani, results in a perfect anagram of "i vanish".
for GuinevereToGwen's anagram contest. my first name, shivani, results in a perfect anagram of "i vanish".
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Overall Vision Originality
Technique ImpactThis really means a lot to me and many other girls (especially teenage ones) who do not feel quite content with their weight.
As someone else mentioned this subject, although it is an important and potentially fatal when practiced, isn't mentioned or talked about very often. I was impacted greatly by the lines:
'not feeling as blessed as i
could have been
if i were
thin.
if i a too much
then why do i feel like
i am not enough'
It really effected me, because I can relate so much.
I would have appreciated some capitals for the i's, but apart from that I found that it flowed nicely and smoothly.
It really is a beautiful piece, very relatable and well written.
You deserve the Daily Devianation.
Thankyou.