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two a.m,
in your kitchen,
lighting cigarettes on your stove.
i'm thankful for
your addiction
or your arms wouldn't be
holding me close.

time is as long as
this cigarette will allow -
the present,
the future,
is here & now.

with each flick
of my wrist,
my eyes do the same -
from your clothes
to your oceanic eyes
to your sunken in face.
you know
i want your taste -

but ashes linger
in my mouth
& your hand headed south
& i guess we were playing
different games.

i searched for the words
to fill your
unsaid thoughts
but you searched for
my body's beginning
to connect its dots.
lighting cigarettes on stoves is frustrating when you're intoxicated, have never done it before, & don't even smoke.
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Given 2013-08-23
crosswords + dot-to-dots. by ~setmyworldintomotion is filled with lingering images and thoughts, detailing an intimate scene between two people effortlessly. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner May 10, 2014   Writer
This is just perfect. Seriously. I know I'm way late to the game but this is a completely deserving DD. Bravo.
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you very much!! :heart:
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schriftsteller Featured By Owner May 18, 2014   Writer
Very welcome!
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SilverInkblot Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! Just a note to let you know that I've featured this piece in my end-of-the-year journal feature :) (Smile)
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Jan 3, 2014
thank you so much! :heart::heart:
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mac11w Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful <3 I love poetry
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you very much.  Heart 
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mac11w Featured By Owner Sep 2, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You are very welcome :)
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kidlover88 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
This...is so beautiful!!!!!!
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you. <3
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KyandiTsueMewMew Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
You've created very vivid imagery with such simple words. It's amazing how powerful and effective something can be when the right words are used. Excellent writing, you've just got yourself a new follower!
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you so much for the positive feedback, you're much too lovely. i'm glad you like it! Heart Heart 
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KyandiTsueMewMew Featured By Owner Sep 1, 2013  Hobbyist Photographer
No problem.
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creativelycliche Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Professional Writer
Congrats on the DD! This piece is incredible. 
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thank you! Heart 
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Hi there! I'm Jasmine, a staff blogger from :iconpoeticalcondition:. Just to let you know I've featured your piece in this journal: poeticalcondition.deviantart.c…
It's a round-up of all of our members who have received a DLD or DD over the past 9 days, so please do check it out!
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you for the feature, it made me smile. Heart
 
poetical condition never leaves me starved of new artists to discover, too.
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madameshadowenn Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are most welcome hun! It really was no trouble :rose:
I'm so glad you're having a good experience with the group :love:
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Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
This is such an interesting poem. The allusion of smoking to romance, in my mind, is unusual and that is what makes the scene so amazing as well.

Congrats on the DD! This is really great!
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you for the kind words, that means a lot to me. Heart 
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Malco735 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. It's a really good piece of work :D
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funkylime123 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Wow, this poem is amazing! I loved the melodious flow, and, correct me if I'm wrong, is this about how a woman wants to figure out a man's mind and a man wants to figure out a woman's body?
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thank you! you're lovely, & spot on. Heart 
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funkylime123 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Student General Artist
You're welcome! And thank you.
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Schneefuechsin Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you so much!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you so much!! i actually didn't even know 'til you commented! <33
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Aug 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure, enjoy it :happybounce:
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Qihah Featured By Owner Aug 23, 2013
somehow i feel that this is romantic :meow:
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
haha i never intended it to be, but i guess i do understand how you see it as romantic. (:
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NOTHINandEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
has a very smooth and melodic flow to it. good bits of  imagery.
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you so much. i'm glad you liked it. +thanks for the favourite & watch! <3
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NOTHINandEVERYTHING Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
my pleasure! thanks for the follow back. i apologize in advance for the failed attempts at writing of mine and/or my lack of consistent activity lol
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
no problem. you definitely don't fail!
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chancerox Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
the implications of this are so different from its imagery; i really love how you have to look a bit deeper to find them. 
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thanks for the positive feedback! greatly appreciated.
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013   Writer
I love this, really pretty imagery and it has a great structure and flow :heart:
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you! <3
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OurBraveHeroine Featured By Owner Aug 20, 2013   Writer
You're welcome! :)
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