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her paperthin skin
bear the scars from within
& his hands seek
all that his eyes fail to satisfy.
he'll try to read her like braille -
he is too blind
to see otherwise.

actions may speak louder than words
but his touch has little worth
to someone who knows it can't
get worse.

if his thirst is quenched
by mere touch,
then maybe
he doesn't care too much
& if he is too poor of himself
then is she too cheap?
why does he explore each scar
like it's a prize
for him to keep?

an eye for an eye
would leave the whole world blind
but what do you do
if you want to leave the whole world
behind?
i intended to explore the cliched concept of braille from a non- you-know-my-heart-so-well-i-love-you view, but i felt like it just didn't come naturally to me.
hopefully you manage to make something of it. all feedback is welcome.
my muse is still not back so consequently everything i write is turning crap.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Golden.

"an eye for an eye
would leave the whole world blind
but what do you do
if you want to leave the whole world
behind?"

Simple.

Follow the only love that has true meaning. The perfect love.
The love of Christ. 

And make sure your mate (if any) shares the same values and truths as you do.

Have a blessed one.
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thank you.
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Shinseinasenshi Featured By Owner Mar 27, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
:)
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imaginative-lioness Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
WHYAREYOUSODAMNFANTASTIC?!

Yet another fantastic piece. I really loved how you explored this concept. I was captured instantly by the opening stanza, it is just beautifully written. But my favourite part of the entire poem would have to be the ending. I love when poems end on a question, it really makes the reader think.

The only thing about this poem would be that at times the stanzas didn't flow to the next one as well. For example, the first two. If you read them aloud, I think you would see what I mean. 

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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014
wow, thank you very much for the lovely comment.
ah, you make a valid point. i shall attempt to fix the line breaks now. :)
thank you. :heart:
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
interesting approach, the palpable (har, har) undercurrent of fear glossed with self-loathing makes it a visceral read, even if it didn't come as pure inspiration
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
thank you for the feedback!
whilst i did find the exploration a little difficult, it does have a (somewhat large) part of me embedded. i'm glad you made something of it. (:
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
if your poem inspires an emotion in me, it was successful. that's the same standard I use for my poetry. I understand completely about the muse. sometimes it flows effortlessly and it feels right and perfect, even if it hurts and sometimes it dries up and there is so much you wish you could say. but it always comes back, like a dam bursting. :)
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013
you've phrased it perfectly, & that's an excellent simile.
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
our relationship with our muse is something divine, a mystery of life that only poets and other artists get to experience. it can be both a blessing and a curse, for how badly you want it when it is gone but for the beauty that we can unleash from within us, and the lives we can touch because of it. I need to read more of your work.
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