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it was autumn's beginning
when he scattered a combination of kisses
on my collarbones & chest
(the rusted gate to the crevice of my crux)
in a vain attempt to unlock the possibility of a love so parched,
like the terrain of his treachery,
that the sweat determined to fall down our backs
would be enough to quench his thirst -
as if each kiss would be enough to transform my entire core
into a garden of his own
to play in.

with each kiss
he planted flowers in my heart,
with roots down to the core of my being,
knowing of the dark clouds
pouring down the rain from my brain,
nourishing the fruits of his labour
in a cool whirl -
a breeze enough to ruffle even the smallest of feathers,
swirl the dead-most leaves,
& arouse the most dormant
of souls.

even if each kiss was enough to transform the crumbling of gates
(like an autumn leaf
slow dancing its way to the ground
in a fear of being crushed
by the foot steps left on my heart),
the falling of summer's lust,
& the trembling of hands against the chilly air
into ember-tinged petals
(to keep summer's spark alive),
he would believe my weathered mind incapable of rising from the ashes.

he was a summer gift,
a present to the future of no future
but autumn was always his favourite season -
he never did like to watch the flowers
bloom.
fiction. he hated autumn.

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my entry for `dreamsinstatic's 5th Annual Poetry Screams Prompt Contest. the prompt used is "autumn kiss".

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admittedly not one of my finer works. i have spent too much time simply staring at the outline of this piece & feeling unable to adequately fill the words in so feedback is more than encouraged.

EDIT: changed line breaks. am i doing this correctly?


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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Writer

with each kiss
he planted flowers
in my heart,
with roots down
to the core of my being,

 

My favourite part. Don't know why. Those lines just caught me. Took my breath away.

 

Another beautiful poem. You might not think it's one of your best works, but it turned out beautifully. I think you did a wonderful job! =D

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thanks so much for the positive comment! i'm glad you like it; you made me smile. :heart:
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imperfect-parachute Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2013  Student Writer

Haha, that's good. It made me smile knowing that I made you smile. And you're welcome =) 

 

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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
oh damnit i love this... 
its like you took the words from my mouth and the emotions from inside my heart.. 
keep your head up dear you will get through..  (:
<3

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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
thank you very much for the kind words & the favourite. :) sorry to hear that you can relate. hope all is well. :heart:
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pepper131361 Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
thanks dear note me anytime if you ever needda talk (:
<3
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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Nov 6, 2013
thank you & likewise; my inbox is always open. :heart:
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Fleeting-Epiphany Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013

There were a few clichés but not a bad poem at all.

 

I like how you compared the relationship like the end of a warm summer lust, only doomed to fall as foliage in autumns ruse. The ending was very powerful indeed.

 

A good read. =)

 

 

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setmyworldintomotion Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2013
ah, you put it better than i ever could. thank you very much for the feedback. :) i'm glad you enjoyed it despite the cliches, haha.
+thank you for the favourite. :aww:
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