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I am
The upward curl
Of her mouth,
The smile she wears
When she has no doubt
That what she sees
Is true.
I am all her cares.
I am the glimmer
In her eyes -
All she sees
Because I leave her blind.
I am the polluted oxygen
She thrives off of -
The very same toxicity
Coursing through her veins,
Merely a harlequin
Who increases her pains.
I am the king
Of her body,
Of her heart.

I am all that she values
And I value all that
She has to lose.
I am the fall
Before the pain,
The slow dancing
Of the dying leaves
In a season
Without the rain.
I am the largest planet
In her universe,
Maybe not her sun
But I am the only one
Her earth
Revolves around.
I am the diamonds
Around her neck,
Throttling her with authority
And leaving her to be
Nothing but a silent wreck.

I am the one
To whom she willingly
Sacrificed her sanity,
The one
Who should consider himself lucky
To receive it all for free.
I am lacking
The adrenaline that conquest
Should bring -
The fire I set ablaze
To triumph her
Old ways
Now means only ashes remain
And she's burnt out.
I am not proud
Of starting fires
And leaving much
To be desired
But my goal has been met
And I am perfectly aware
That it's me
She'll never forget.

I am conscious
Of the fact that
She falls to her knees
To satisfy my every wish
And I am
Able to tower over her
As she attempts to please
My desires
Though they are childish.
I am a painter
And she is my masterpiece,
Worth a thousand words
But words escape me,
And who's to say
What I didn't?
I am
The ice in her soul,
Freezing her now stone cold
Heart and leaving her unsure
Of where to start.
for :iconwriters--club:'s Confessions of a King Literature Contest.
click the above links for the group's page & the contest's rules.

the king is based on the kings of hearts, diamonds, clubs, & spades, from a standard deck of cards, with tarot card influences.
the hearts suit, in this poem, relates to the subject's body.
the diamonds suit can be associated with power, values, the season autumn, & the planet jupiter. i tried to incorporate all aspects into that stanza.
the clubs suit can be associated with business, fire, achievements, & goals. again, i tried to incorporate these aspects.
finally, the spades suit can be associated with arrogance, pride, & winter, all of which i tried to include. spades is usually at the beginning of the deck which is why, ironically enough, i left it to the end & concluded it with hints of a new beginning.

this poem's probably the first & last time i'll write with capital letters & not use ampersands, haha.

feedback is encouraged as i wrote this much more quickly than i should have & consequently probably didn't know what the hell i was going on about.
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prettyflour Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This has been Featured in mu journal!


:)
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thank you so much! :aww: :heart::heart:
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DeathNoteGrrrrrrrL Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Congrats on 1st place! Well deserved! :D
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thank you! & thanks for the favourite. :aww: :heart:
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DeathNoteGrrrrrrrL Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Very welcome!
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
:wow: such a beautiful contest entry, and a well deserved 1st Place! :heart:

Well done! :clap:
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you! & for the favourite. your comment made me smile. :heart:
p.s. you're quite talented!
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WalkinginDreamlight Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome, my friend :hug:

:aww: thank you kindly :blush:
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Slayer-1412 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Student General Artist
Congrats on placing first in the contest! :D
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you, & thanks for the favourite! :heart: congrats on the honourable mention! :aww:
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Slayer-1412 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Student General Artist
You deserve it! I really liked the flow of your poems (visually, they make me giggle with the rough bumpy vertical wall ;u; )

Thanks! I didn't think I would actually place so I'm really happy :D
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haha, sorry? what do you mean? what "rough bumpy vertical wall" are you referring? S:

you deserve it!
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Slayer-1412 Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Ah... Try looking at your poem, just looking, not reading ;u;
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the Friday Night Feature! Still an awesome poem!
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thanks! ^_^
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no worries, gurl! you the shit, it is what it is!
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dreamsinstatic Featured By Owner Sep 13, 2013
Your fantastic work has been featured in Friday Night Features.
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thank you so much! that made me smile. :happybounce: 
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Idontknowwhoyouknow Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
That was awesome! I wish you luck, fellow contestant!
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thanks so much, good luck to you too! <3
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Idontknowwhoyouknow Featured By Owner Sep 12, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! I hope the competition is a fair game! Btw, can you review my story too? fav.me/d6lcbt1 (It's not fantasy. It's Victorian-Edwardian-Roaring 20s, although the last one is the time the king narrated his story.)
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DJChocolate-Lover Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Student General Artist
There's something about this that is just really catching. It's intriguing and pulls the eye through the poem, devouring each word.
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you so much for the kind words, & the favourite. <3
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xWickedxRosex Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Student Writer
Lovely <3
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thank you. <3
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xWickedxRosex Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Student Writer
No problem
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The-Funkiest-Penguin Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautifully written
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thank you very much, & for the favourite. <3
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The-Funkiest-Penguin Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
no problem:)
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kakashi-narutorules Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
This is brilliant!! Love it!
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thank you! i appreciate the support. :heart:
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kakashi-narutorules Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
You are sooooo welcome! I love this poem!!! 

PS:- May I show to my english teacher??
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thanks again. <3
oh, did you want to show this poem to your english teacher? S: i can't see why not, but please let me know what he/she says haha.
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kakashi-narutorules Featured By Owner Sep 11, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Welcome again!

And yes I do because in my opinion its awesome! 

And ok i will. And she is a she XD
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VertFey Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Was caught with the first lines - enough to click and find out. Perfect.
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thank you, i appreciate it very much. & thanks for the favourite! :heart:
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
this may seem pretentious, but I copy/pasted your this poem and tinkered with the stanzas to make the flow fit better with the rhyming and I changed just a few words. If you do not like it, feel free to disregard my changes.

I am the upward curl
Of her mouth,
The smile she wears
When she has no doubt
That what she sees is true.
I am all her cares.
I am the glimmer in her eyes -
All she sees 

because I leave her blind.
I am the polluted oxygen
She thrives off of -
The very same toxicity
Coursing through her veins,
Merely a harlequin
Who increases her pains.
I am the king
Of her body,
Of her heart.

I am all that she values  

and I value all that she has to lose.
I am the fall
Before the pain,
The slow dancing

of the Dying leaves

In a season without the rain.
I am the largest Planet in her universe,
Maybe not her sun
But I am the only one
Her earth revolves around.
I am the diamonds around her neck,
Throttling her with Authority 

and leaving her 
nothing but A silent wreck.

I am the one to whom she willingly
sacrificed her sanity,
the one who should consider himself lucky
To receive it all For free.
I am lacking the adrenaline

that conquest should bring -
The fire I set ablaze 

To triumph her old ways
Now means only ashes remain
And she's burnt out.
I am not proud
Of starting fires

and leaving much to be desired
But my goal has been met
And I am perfectly aware 

it's me 
that she'll never forget.

I am conscious of the fact

that she falls to her knees
To satisfy my every wish
And I am able to tower over her
As she attempts to please
My desires

though they are childish.
I am a painter

and she is my masterpiece,
Worth a thousand words
But words escape me,
And who's to say
what I didn't?
I am
The ice in her soul,
Freezing her stone
Cold heart and leaving her unsure
Of where to start.

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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
thank you for the feedback. :) (Smile)
whilst i am not completely happy with the way i spaced out the poem, i thought i'd leave it in the four separate stanzas to highlight the four separate suits & the themes of each. admittedly, i think i prefer your spacing. i took your couple of word changes (thanks for making me realise that it should be "i am all that she values") & changed the appropriate words.
i cannot stress enough that i really am quite new to the whole spacing & presentation aspect of poetry, so thank you for opening my eyes a little. :) (Smile) 
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i have read it out loud many times haha. i agree that the pause should feel natural, & i can make it sound so, but only because i know how to considering i am the one that came up with it. i acknowledge that it's probably not the best, for the sake of the poem, but i seem to be stubborn on highlighting the four suits.
thank you very much for all that you have said. :)
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I kept the four suites when I edited it. I double checked. Highlighting them is excellent. It is a natural, thematic division. Any way you look at it gurl, that shit is BANANAS lol
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oh wow, i just read your amendments on a computer as opposed to my phone, your spacing's actually a lot different to what i initially thought. (it came up a little random on my phone). thanks again, it makes much more sense when i read your version on the computer lol.
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admirer4022 Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
lol, I was wondering, I totally did space it into the four sections. Silly phone. I wrote a new poem tonight (yesterday, to you), I would love to hear what you think of it.
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TrentXmorgan Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
wow.
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:iconsetmyworldintomotion:
...a good wow or a bad wow?
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TrentXmorgan Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
A GREAT wow! :) (Smile) 
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thank you! Hug 
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TrentXmorgan Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013
Great work, keep it up Nod  and you're welcome.
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dizzybeyor Featured By Owner Sep 10, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Good wow :squee:
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thank you! Hug 
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